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I like this chapter alot! I like the tons of references to other events (past and future). And that end of the test!  It is as horrific as unexpected, and I totally pictured it like a movie in my head. You really surprised me with this, and I'm curious how this thing will pack out. Well done!

I havent had such a severe hangover for a long time, so glad to have my ultimate medicine

Looks like the Fall of Richthofen has began. So cool to see you've used the MPD sacrificial event as his mental turning point. I also like the way how he lost the voices for a moment prior chapter, followed by the realization that he would never get rid of them, now causing him to slowly turning more insane. Like he gave up. Good building up towards this!

That moment the voices were gone....and later came back....

I can feel Richthofen's emotion on that moment. I felt it down my stomach: Its a real torture, rather than a gift

An enjoyable thing to do on a hangover day. I'm curious to Peter's story, as very little of it is known (which, I can imagine, makes it only more fun to write about). Chapter 18 has a great play on the characters! In the early chapters, Groph was always a bit the 'black sheep' member, underrespected by Richthofen and Schuster, but his character has made a major change. Schuster slowly starts to realize he is surrounded by insanity and I can actually relate a lot to him. Richthofen....his character is still your masterpiece. An interesting past: idealistic and good as well as insane and mercyless.

I remember some prior story-arc ideas (like the one about Mason in Vietnam) and felt they all had great potential. The best of those, however, I am of the opinion are Honor's Suffering and the one about the mysterious blacksmith in Nevada...

I once started writing a fan-made Storybook arc (of three chapters) about a CDC agent trapped in a neverending Grief loop, though I quickly stopped due to realizing I cannot write properly a book as well as my vocabulary is limited. But it might be an idea.

19 hours ago, RadZakpak said:

Also, what do you think of Peter? I know I haven't written much of him yet, and the next chapter is about him, but what more do you want to know about him? How do you relate/not relate to him? Is he boring or intriguing? What situations can you see him in as a spy in the OSS?

I was never really a fan of the over-the-top, brutal, simple-minded type of hero soldier Dempsey is, but McCain is kinda the opposite. He is softer, yet brave, funny (in a way better way than Dempsey) and has emphaty. I think it is a character alot of readers can relate to, as he seems one of the most 'normal' persons so far (not in a boring way, though). However, as with all characters, I like to see him having a soft spot/flaw or something. Perhaps one time he chooses for his own life above someone else, as it is the nature of human survival (however I absolutely dont see him as an egoist. Perhaps something else is better fitting). Eventually, Peter will die, as only a few main characters do. I hope that at that time, readers really live in him and are really saddened by the fact he dies. If you succeed in that, you are a pro-writer.

Another thing: A lot of the lore about Broken Arrow, CIA, Cold War, etc, happens on the background (not in a map). Perhaps some of them are fitting in parts of Book 2. Alot of it can be discovered in the early chapters of Book 3, at least.

To be fair, I think this is my favourite chapter thus far. It has kinda zero correlation with known events in the Story, while it is completely canon and explains quite some small things (Group 601, Monty's nudges, Schrieker zombies). But that is not the only reason I like it, it is the whole thing that hangs in the air.

- The father who sacrifices for his child, the villager who sacrifices for Richthofen, Richthofen's story about the Hitlerjugend kid and his mentality in general: Great. It pictures some bittersweet sphere.

- A reminder that zombies aren't fun, easy to kill enemies as they are in game. This attack in the mines was really gruesome and kinda well fitting in a sci-fi horror movie. I could really see the picture in front of me (and the sound of screaming undead and humans).

- The play of characterisms. I'm really fund on Richthofen's idealism, and even more fund on the slowly change the world around him makes his mind do. That story with the Hitlerjugend once again reminds us that Richthofen sometimes lacks empathy in a way, without him wanting it. I also like how you made the reader exactly understand what kind of person Schuster is.

3 hours ago, RadZakpak said:

On the other hand, zombies allow for more brutal and creative deaths without the question of morality

So I was recently thinking about this, concerning a real zombie apocalypse. Since I live in a village I would know alot of zombies, previously friends, family and other fellow-villagers. In a war you fight against your enemies (which are, of course, mostly just as normal people as I am, but the 'bad guys' in my eyes). In a war against the undead you would fight the victims, among who people you know. I might prefer to die than to kill them.

Abvipusly, I'm going too deep into this. A zombie apocalypse would be impossible, as a virus is impossible to be both extremely infectious, as well as being capable of occupy the mind, and the world of science not being able to predict these mutations etc

I want you to know that I, unconsioussly, always really look forward to new chapters. I admire your speed with writing the last ones. When I see a chapter is released, I struggle with being patient and wait till a good moment for reading it. Finally, I find a soft spot on the sofa, get a glass of water and enjoy the new stuff.

The titles are really well chosen, if you know the background. Of course, 'Hard Landing' is a WaW mission, but it is the mission that includes the NDU airfield, and funnily enough McCain and Hilario also get on an airport this chapter. And finally, it refers to the crash of the plane (spoilers alert). Love that last (repeating) sentence of Hilario and your humour.

As a side question: Was writing a chapter in which was fighted against living soldiers much different than writing about fighting against undead ones?

A very unexpected chapter, I like it! Also, I adore the fact that it is (as is your entire Storybook, of course) based on real events, and the occurance of Takeo's father. 

1 hour ago, RadZakpak said:

As another note, this chapter is a bit shorter than some previous chapters, and while writing it I was doing a lot of reformatting of my plans for each chapter in this book. I kept trying to cut out chapters to have an average page length more like that of a real novel, as if I keep the chapters as long as they have been the book would be much too big. But then I thought, I really shouldn't be doing a disservice to this story by omitting so much, especially since I am posting it here where there is no limit. From now on I am going to ignore any thoughts about a chapter being too short/too long or being unnecessary to the overall book because if I try to think too far ahead I will end up stifling what I can do with this story. Of course, if I ever did release a physical version of this book, I would change a ton, and write a whole second draft that is more concise, or I would split it up into two books. But for now, I'm going to remain somewhat unpredictable.

Not sure what you mean here. I mean, it is totally normal for a book to have not-equal chapters, right? If you would produce a physical version (which would be, for real, AWESOME and I would definately buy it), why couldn't it have non equal chapters?

One critique thing: In many chapters you are the devil in the details: describing how beautifull or gruesome the environment, a room, a person's expression, whatever is. This chapter does have that, but in a lesser degree than usual. I imagine the group walking through Filipinese jungle or whatever, with bodies on the edge of the muddy road or something, but thats up to the imagination of the reader (which has is charms as well). Perhaps lots of people like this 'faster' way of storytelling, but I'm more a guy for the details

Btw also love your great metaphores, memories, life lessons and other 'short stories' in your story. This intro reminds me of the intro of the 'Hemlock Philosophy' chapter

Lets fce the reality: This is so awesome. Despite me knowing the zombie story, every chapter you write makes me look forward to the next and makes me curious to it. You insert only very rarely some radio/audio reel quotes, and while your story follows all given information and is completely canon it is a true, complete story on its own, so I still dont know what will happen next. Love this so much. This is just exactly what happened, but then in more detail. Also love the way you give the characters their character: That is perhaps even more pretty.

The new mobile menu works perfectly, and I am way too much satisfied with that fact haha. Danke schön<3

Look forward to the testsubject chapters (at least, I assume they are about Nikolai, Takeo and Dempsey? Or perhaps Dempsey alone since it are all chapters of the American WaW Campaign). The first steps to the 'brotherhood' they'll get later.

20 hours ago, RadZakpak said:

Chapter 12 of Book 1, "Faithful Servant" is now on the site!

 

I have also gone back and made slight changes to previous chapters. I recently realized the Wunderwaffe DG-2 did not have its first prototype created until 1942, so previous references to the DG-2 are changed to be about the first version of the project.

A better birthday gift I couldn't wish from CoDZ! 

The horror of this chapter really got me. I dunno why, but I find wearing a blood-covered lab coat on a party and that monkey having a real skin rather than being a toy way more horrid than bloody organ-covered zombie slaughter. Gives me a real nasty feeling, next to the remaining ''brutal'' humour (similar to the Inglorious Basterds and Hatefull Eight Style). Good job

1 hour ago, RadZakpak said:

It’s my first week back from break and things look bleak in my math class but we will see.

Math is an absolute killer. Believe it or not, even in a biological study you cannot escape it. Recently had an exam in algebra (all in English), mostly about antidifferation and everything including that, but Im not good in it. Gave my neighbour a bottle of special beer and he explained everything to me better than any teacher (he's a physician), so lucky me I guess. 

If you got one specific part you dont understand, ask me, but in general I dont think I can help you. Best wishes man, I totally feel you

The way you've written this chapter makes the story and it's characters very alive! How's school doing btw? Something with IT, right?

Ahh, it would be a shame if those fine pieces of story telling would be disappeared in the deep dark abandoned corners of the Internet. Glad you brought them back!

I like it! Dont fully understand the ending, though. I assume he is Illuminati, but is he also known in the CoDZ story? Love the mentions of those Illuminati facilities.

Oh, and one time you say Sophia but you mean Samantha

Some brilliant shit you've got there Rad! Took some time to read it but I enjoyed every bit of it. Undone is so cleverly made: It even makes the "second outbreak of NDU radio signals" quote canon. While reading it, I forgot that Book 1 ends with Sam just in the MPD: This chapter is a brilliant intro the new powers of this entity.

Danke Schön is a masterpiece. I would personally more be in favour in two short chapters rather than one large, but that's just me. Richthofen is a funny man, but sometimesI forget how cruel he actually is. And why the heck do they let the only drunk person drive!

Some fan-creation:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZcezWbaNfl-Cz7XnZd273CXmRnwaJJNV3DSv52srx2s/edit#heading=h.bz7znaknjssv

Your story really must be printed out in real life...or downloadable on a Ereader. 

On 8-4-2018 at 4:20 AM, RadZakpak said:

Say hello to Chapter 9 of Book 1, Novus Ordo Seclorum: http://www.callofdutyzombies.com/story/book1ch9

 

This chapter is from the perspective of a little seen and little heard from character: Doctor Schuster. I really enjoyed fleshing out his personality some and showing Richtofen's downfall from an outside perspective. On that note, if you are a fan of my work and Richtofen's downfall, check out my thread on that subject here if you haven't already: http://www.callofdutyzombies.com/topic/185493-the-tragical-history-of-the-life-and-death-of-doctor-richtofen/?tab=comments#comment-1766150

I liked this chapter very well and good that you've linked your Richthofen's Downfall post here as well. I don't think we got a chapter ever before on which that topic can be applied that much. Schuster's memories of the believed to be dead Doctor Richthofen are in contrast with the Richthofen who arrives in Der Riese later that day. I think it is fair to say that the real Richthofen actually did die after being teleported to the Moon.

I had a Sunday morning hangover-->saw a new chapter of the Storybook was released-->cooked an egg, laid back on the sofa and began to read. Once again a nice job. The wall writing part kinda reminds me of a scene in the Crystal Skull. And Richthofen's mind for the first time obey the Apothican voices: the beginning of his downfall into madness. I like the psychologic aspect behind this chapter.

About Schlaukopf, can't you put that chapter later in the Storybook? To scrap it completely seems a bit bummer to me

Niiiiceee! I really look forward to these! Trouble in Khe Dang is an unexpected one. It is related in some way with the BO mission S.O.G. and the Pentagon outbreak, I guess? Also, is the mining town of Jeb Brown in/near Groom Lake, Nevada (at least, I guess so with the 115 mine). That would be pretty interesting, and I'm also curious how you will describe Jeb's "angels/mysterious forces".

A question: Have "Night of the Undead", "Extraction at the Asylum" and "Call of the Dead" multiple chapters? Because otherwise they could easily be put in Book 1 & 2. Anyways, if you ever need information of something (e.g. a detailed description of an Easter Egg, a explanation for something you cannot think of any, etc) just ask the community.

I look forward to it!

Nice work. I am fund on the whole Cold War admosphere that the story gives, the hints to Broken Arrow and even quite some Black Ops campaign references. Also nice done with the conspiracy stuff, about Griffin Station, Groom Lake and the times of the US and SU governments with former Nazi technology.

Btw, a lovely 2018!

Yeah, its all fixed now. BTW, about Book 2: I know Blundell kinda changed the BO1 story a bit by introducing Richthofen's diary in Der Riese and Ascension, in the timeline, and removing Richthofen's space outfit in ZC Ascension. My personal opinion: Keep your Book 2 the way it currently is. I like your story and reason why Ultimis travels to the Ascension cosmodrome more than Blundells reason. Keep it to Zielinski's story, and keep Richthofen wear the space suit. In short: Dont change anything in your Book 2.

And would you mind adding the FIVE chapters to the Storybook pages?

w00t w00t! A new chapter! You cant even imagine how happy I always am when a new part of the story is released. I post this comment just on impuls after reading of your update, so I haven't read the update yet, but I'll definately will. @Mods: the teleport button in the book still show the old chapters, while when clicking on "next chapter", you get the new chapters. 

I also just thought about how huge this project actually is. The story of a very popular game (mode), with countless followers/players, being described in the formaat of a book. Not just an informative book, but a real nice to read story. One with characters with interesting characterisms, one with jokes, one with complete descriptions of the environment and atmosphere, and one in which we get a view in the heads of the characters. And that while all what you write is either canon or described in such way that it could be canon. If you dont mind, I'm going to try to make contact with Treyarch. I'm sure the zombie developers would be very proud on their creation when reading your CoDZ Tales.

Keep up the good work, and dont make my words hurry you. Work on it when you feel like.

 

Hey everyone, really long time no see. I have good news and bad news. The good news is, despite the hiatus, I am not giving up on this project. Honestly, I think about potential story threads and character encounters all the time. But, with every yin, there is a yang, and the truth is I am overwhelmed with school work more so than previous semesters, and for that reason the hiatus will probably continue. It seems worrying that I have not released a full chapter since July 26th, if you could even count that Monty intro as a full chapter. But there is a multiverse chapter centered around Takeo that I did some work on during a short bout of free time, but I have had very little of it since to finish it.

 

I hate to just pop in, empty-handed, to say that I'm busy again. So I will leave you with some behind-the-scenes preliminary stuff I've written that will hopefully spark some interest in the project again. As always, criticisms and suggestions are encouraged. Better to get them out now than after I've already written them I suppose.

 

First I present a rough draft of the first chapter of Honor's Suffering. It is meant to tell Takeo's story at Division 9's Island facility right up until the events of Zetsubou No Shima. You will notice it ends very abruptly because I had to go to class and never got around to finishing it. So note this is a first draft and partially incomplete.

 

This is the outline for chapters 1-7 of Honor's Suffering, going into detail on the plot of each chapter. I was really looking forward to writing this one and hope to at some point soon.

 

Here is the outline for the first 8 chapters of Book 3. I wrote these out when I was really invested in Victis' story, and I really did look forward to expanding on them since they are not characterized in the game very well and I have a lot of freedom to take them where I want.

 

Here is the outline for all 45 chapters of Book 1 after chapter 7. Yep, I planned that far ahead. These are fairly basic but that is mostly because I based it around the events of the timeline.

 

I also have the last set of chapters for Book 4 planned out in detail. Why am I not showing them here? Well, they're too awesome to be shown as just an outline. I think the experience would be spoiled if I just revealed what I had planned for them as they have me very excited. So maybe a while down the road when I get around to Book 4 and get to the end, I will be able to write out those chapters.

 

Anyway, I hope this all made up for the hiatus, just a little bit. I am not giving up on this project. I am already too invested. Let's just hope Treyarch's next game doesn't flip everything I think I know upside down again

Whoa, those stories are really pretty. The Honor's Suffering storyline is very good: The emphasis lays on horrific experiments, the abuse of nature and questionable ethics. I also like the fact that this story is merely something small that happened in the Grand Scheme of the Zombie Story, yet you have worked it out and created a true story of it. 

The story of Victis is epic as well: I like it how it starts with "some zombies on the street" which turns out to be a global apocalypse later. Something that you have not mentioned, but you might want to add in a chapter as side information, is the breakdown of Earth's governments, facilities, etc (chaos in the UN HQ, floods in coastral areas, people who fled to islands, megacities (https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Megacity) that are overrun by the undead, military performance that fails, etc). On the other hand, not talking about it gives the story a pretty neat "Mystery" and "Ignorance" feeling: The survivors have lost all contact with the rest of the world and are really on their own now. 

I am in the last grade of pre-university education: My activity on the site is decreased as well. The year turns out to be harder then I initially thought, but I also like it because after 6 years, the entire class became a really close group. Anyway, good to hear from you Rad, and good to know the story is still WIP. And remember, there is no obligation: Work on it only when you feel like.

Alot of luck!